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In some area of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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Some young people think that the order for going out after a limited moment without guarding by adults is imposed in some are of the American.
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 is the good ruling to millennium by the local authority which can be accepted by their parents. On the one hand, it is the best barrier to the teenagers from going to clubs and bar which can pose to them misbehaviour having a friend with gangsters.
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 curfew. A law which is sometime should be submitted to local people if required to rule the district should be released by local police, as I think,
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 protecting their soul. Rule of the law should be maintained by the not only authority, but
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 regional folks,
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 they can live without disturb with anyone. Crime rates are mostly high in
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 parents should obey the law which is ruling that not to let their child to go out without their assistance. Most of the cocaine trader search their buyer in the
night
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 when they usually target the young people around the club and bar area. Tender who has not controlled by their parents may contact those who threaten their life addicting heroine, which can be buy and sell easily as those in darkness area. Even thought parents are not spare
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 to look after their children who want to go out at
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 should request to assist by their relative. In conclusion, let the young people alone in a
night
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 is like imposing them to the danger that can even their life threaten by darkness side people,
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 parents have responsible to obey the local curfew.
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