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Tourism is increased in many countries. Does tourism brings more advantages or disadvantages to a country

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Nowadays, more and more people are wishing to explore different parts of the world. That's the reason
tourism
 is one of the fastest growing industry right now and is generating huge revenues for the countries. I believe that
tourism
 outweigh the disadvantages it brings to the community.
To
Suggestion
Two
 began with,
tourism
 directly contributes to the
country
's economy.
This
 is because it boosts the local business, which in turn generates higher tax payment to the
state
.
For example
, Pakistani government collected 10 billion of tax in the fiscal year 2018 alone because of the boost in local business, where average tax collection has been just 2 billion in the previous years.
Secondly
,
tourism
 helps in improving the
country
's image in front of the world community.
This
 is mainly because tourist always prefer to go to safe places and when they return to their home
country
, they tell their people about the security and hospitality of the ones nation.
For instance
, before 2018, Pakistan was considered as a terrorist
state
,
however since
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however, since
 2019, when people from all around the world started visiting Pakistan, it changed the
country
's image from a terrorist
state
 to a friendly
state
.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages of
tourism but
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tourism, but
 when compared with the advantages it brings are deniable.When most of the people go to other states to visit, they may not take care of the cleanliness of that area. They may throw waste on the roads which makes the area dirty and unhygienic.
In other words
, a lot of people came to Pakistan to visit the famous Karachi
beach
 in 2019, but when they left the
beach
, they left all their waste at the
beach
 which polluted the environment of the
beach
. To sum up, I believe that
tourism
 favour the
country
's reputation in a number of ways. If the government introduces rules which stops the tourists from contributing to pollution,
then
 it is advantageous to the
state
.
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