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in some countries, it is now for people to buy product made in other countries .to what extent do the benefits of this development outweigh the problem?

#countries #people #product #development
it
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It
 is not unusual for consumers to purchase imported merchandise thanks to the development of globalization.
there
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There
 are concerns about the negative impact on
local economy
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the local economy
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,
yet
such
 concerns should not obscure the good that comes from the variety of products. Importing products can benefit the local people by improving their living standard.
imported
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Imported
 products are normally from companies which have
whizzy
 equipment and prefect logistics.
the
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The
 customers would have access to a wide range of goods with high quality
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,
from the food to clothing and cosmetics to private cars.
for
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For
 example
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,
 young ladies in my country prefer buying
skincare
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skin care
 products made in France or Japan for their wonderful effect
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.
Furthermore
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,
importing would boost innovation of products. That
oversea
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over sea
 productions flow into the local market will lead to fierce competition between merchandises made in different countries
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.
to
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To
 appeal more consumers, they have to be creative enough to upgrade their produces.
otherwise
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Otherwise
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,
they are bound to be obsoleted by the market. One problem is that the importing products would damage local small business to some extent.
in
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In
 the less developed area
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,
the local firms
have not generate
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have not generated
 the large-scale economy
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,
so they are not able to employ high-tech equipment to fight back with the foreign products
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.
owning
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Owning
 to the less competitive
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,
their market share will be squeezed by the oversea products.
as
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As
 a result
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,
 some small companies which do not have enough financial support have to go
to
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into
 bankruptcy.
it
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It
 is a tragedy. In conclusion
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that importing products can bring benefits to the local
such
 as superior goods and product innovation
although
 it does harm to the local business.

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