The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zeland between 1901 and 2101
The given line graph illustrates information about different changes in New Zealand's
birth
and death
rates since
1901 until 2101.
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from
Overall
, these opposing trends mean that,
the number of Remove the comma
apply
birth
will decreasing
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decrease
while
degree
of Add an article
the degree
a degree
death
will show opposite
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the opposite
result
and the level of Fix the agreement mistake
results
death
will probably overtake the brith
rate in 2041.
In 1901 the rate of births was Correct your spelling
birth
in
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at
weak
point Correct article usage
a weak
about
20.000 and slowly fluctuated during the 200 years to approximately 42.000. From 1941 to 1961 amount of Change preposition
of about
birth
sharply jumped to peak
which consisted Add an article
the peak
a peak
65
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of 65
thousands
, Change to singular
thousand
however
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,however
after
this
period, the stage of births began gloriously fall.
On the other hand
, despite climbing death's
rate from 10.000 at the start of Change noun form
death
period
, it was not as popular as Add an article
the period
a period
birth
till 1941 when there are crossed with each other. After 1941 the power of death
overtake birth
and the large gap between the two levels will be reversed in the later part of this
century.Submitted by madinahasanjonova on
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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