The diagram shows how the rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in Australia.

The diagram shows how the rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in Australia.
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The diagram illustrates how an Australian town collects rainwater to process in order to use as drinking
water
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, rainwater collected from the rooftops has to be processed by
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and filtered, before it can be used as drinking
water
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, the rain which falls on the rooftop is collected by the gutter and
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runs down the pipe at the side of the house into the drain located under the ground. Each
houses
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collect rainwater in
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a way and passed along underground drains to the
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filter. The
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filter removes any impurities and the
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once filtered continues to flow into the storage tank for
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processing. From
this
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point, the
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flows from the storage to the
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treatment tank.
Chemical
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added
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to the
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for purification in order to make it fit for consumption. Once
water
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is treated and made ready for drinking, it travels along the pipes that lead back to houses where people can use it for daily consumption.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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