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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about whether information should be revealed to the public or not. While some people disagree with the idea of sharing important materials freely, I believe that it is essential to do
this
. On the one hand, there are clear ethical arguments against distributing people understanding about a problem.
Firstly
, knowing something that others do not know about is the best and fastest way to gain popularity and earn a large amount money.
For example
, you discover a new soda ingredient that will suit to the customer's taste, and you are the only one to sell it, certainly you will soon be a millionaire.
Secondly
, some kinds of knowledge are extremely important to
such
 an extent that the inappropriate use of these techniques would probably be a root of some global disasters.
Thus
, people must keep these materials secret.
On the other hand
, the openly sharing of information could help a nation's economic grows noticeably.
To begin
 with, when people all have learned a process of doing something in the most effective way, they can adapt it to their own companies.
As a result
, the profits could be raised to the highest point, which contribute to the increase in the total GDP of their countries.
Besides
, knowledge in the academic world,
such
 as a formula to calculate the distance between the Earth and the moon, if can publicise benefits the younger citizens in developing advanced skills, which is needed to the growth of the economy. The young are the future main workers, so they should obtain special materials to become flexible and creative when they do in the financial industry.
This
 means that their organisation can produce a good product resulting in making numerous revenue. In conclusion, I can understand why people might not want to share as much information as possible, but it seems to me that they should be encouraged to give out the vital understanding to everyone.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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