Many students now work whilst they are studying in college or university. This often results in them having less time to concentrate on their studies as well as feeling under pressure. What are some of cause of this? what solutions could you suggest?

It has become necessary for many students do job while they are studying in college or universities. In
this
essay I will explore the problem and a solution about
this
topic.
Firstly
, I will discuss the negative impact on the study along with working, and
secondly i
Accept comma addition
secondly, I
secondly I
will discuss how working
experience
is important for their post studies.At
last
I will give my opinion for
this
essay and give some ideas for students who are able to both of it. It is clearly seen that, Education is more Expensive now a days, so, Students are in under pressure while they are studying.
As a result
, they start to do
work
for part time job and cover the expenses like food and accommodation.
However
, they cannot concentrate on their studies. It gives a negative impact on their score. If they provide some government grants so they can feel relaxed and achieve their goals.
On the other hand
, doing
work
along with study, students get a working
experience
and a practical knowledge about their
work
.They can
also
get some good idea about
work
and real-life
experience
for their curriculum.
For Example
, If students are working in some coaching classes they may gain teaching
experience
and some basic knowledge in their particular field. So, government should provide some free accommodation or some loans for the undergraduate who are not able to take all
this expenses
Suggestion
these expenses
this expense
. From my opinion, government should give some subsidized for the students who are unable to do
work
whilst they are studying and someone can do it.
This
may not as bad as people are thinking about it
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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