The charts below give Information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy In 2000 and projections for 2050.
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Yemen
and Italy in 2002,
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in
the total amount of population in the year 2050. Generally speaking, only a few Change preposition
for
of
elderly Change preposition
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people
were a citizen of Yemen
and forecast
to be slightly higher in Add a missing verb
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the
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years
later. While
,
the majority of Italian aged between 15-59 Remove the comma
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years
old and it
the number will shrink in the future.
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Yemen
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in Yemen
a
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Yemen
citizen was Change noun form
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person
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people
years
old) while
young people
is
estimated to drop to 37% in 2050. 46.3% were 15-59 Change the verb form
are
years
old in the initial year. In addition
, the number will increase by 11% in 2050. On the contrary
, only 3.6% were elderly people
and it considerably
small when compared to the other aged groups. In the following 50 Add a missing verb
was considerably
years
, it's predicted to increase by almost twice.
Turning to Italy, the majority of Italian people
were aged between 15 and 59 years
old, accounted
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accounting
two-
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two-thirds
third
. Nevertheless
, 50 years
later, the population of these group
is estimated to reduce to just under Fix the agreement mistake
groups
a
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the citizen
citizen
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citizens
people
and it's forecast to rise by about 18%. Lastly
, younger people
were in a range between 11% and 14% in both years
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