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Some people say that technology such as mobile phone are destroying social interaction you agree or disagree

#people #technology #phone #interaction
It is irrefutable that
technology
 are destroying the social interaction. A certain segment of the nation that
technology
 reduce the
time
 to complete the work. While other opine that
technology
effect
the conscious subjective aspect of feeling or emotion
affect
 the
student
,
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,
child because they spend
the more
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more time
the most time
time
 in electronic gadgets
such
 as mobile phone, computer, laptop and other social media sites. I completely agree with the following statement. I would like to explicate it at length in the paragraphs to come.
To begin
 with, the
first
 and the
formost
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for most
 that in the world all most students use the electronic equipment to solve our problems without the help any other
student
 and teachers. In
this
way
 they do not meet personally
.
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.
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On
 other hand
student
 play games other
student
 on mobile
phone laptop
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phone, laptop
 using the
internet
, in
this
way
 children avoid the outdoor games
this
 is
main effect
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a main effect
the main effect
 to reduce the social interaction
.
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.
More over
in addition
Moreover
,
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,
 one more convince point that
can not
can not
cannot
 be ignored almost company provide the cheapest plan of
internet
 and
call
any small compartment
cell
 service
.
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.
For
example jio
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example, go
example go
This
 company gives the cheap
internet
 plan to attract the customers
.
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.
 The customers recharge the cheap plan to use
internet
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the internet
 and call service without any reason
.
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.
 In
this
way
 they spend
the more
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more time
the most time
time
 to
internet
 without any solid work
.
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.
 They
watching
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are watching
watch
 movies on
youtube
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YouTube
 site if one
movies
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movie
 is finish than
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 movies automatic play in
this
way
 they spend
lot
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lots
 of
time
 on the social media
.
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.
 After over all the
anaylsis it
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analysis, it
analysis it
 can be concluded that without any proper reason and
long
of long duration
longtime
time
 use of
technology
 direct effect the human mind and body
.
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.
Government
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The government
 may be action against that company which provide the cheapest
internet
 and call service and
permote
contribute to the progress or growth of
promote
permit
 outdoor activities to attract the public and describe the benefit of social meeting.

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