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Fewer and fewer people walk on a daily basis. What are the reasons and how to encourage them to spend their time walking?

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Walking is one of the useful exercises which lots of scientists recommended to people for becoming healthy.
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, nowadays, fewer people are walking because of modern technology and boring activities. There are some solutions which are creating a healthy lifestyle and organizing interesting actions.
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 with, there are several reasons of a lack people’s interest in walking.
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 and foremost, the technological applications which support people in travelling
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 as electric lifts, escalators can be seen in everywhere in the any country. Mainly because most of the individuals want to do easy of their life with
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 kind of breakthroughs. The
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 cause is boredom of actions.
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, monotonous activities that are repeated all the time by persons.
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, without excitement going for a
walk
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 could happen rarely than other amusing exercises.
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, there are some feasible measures which can encourage humans to take a
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 in their priorities. The
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, organizations should create some competitions which can attract people’s attention to training with sports
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 as running, swimming.
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, having walking mission in a company which employees compete with each other to get the prize.
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, the city should be decorated with beautiful pictures or painting in parks or public areas.
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 method will assist everyone having a
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 with others. In conclusion, the technologies and lack of interest are the main causes of rarely walking and creating competitions, decorating the city are the best solutions of increasing walking activities among the persons who do not like having a
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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