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Band 7.5

You live with a roommate at university but you have trouble studying because of a problem related to your roommate. Write a letter to an administrator at your university and include: -Who you are -The problem -What you suggest they do

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
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 letter finds you well, I am R pursuing my second-year course at your esteemed institution. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction with my current roommate at university. My ID is ST12345 and I reside in room 315, my roommate is a first-year student,he often hosts gatherings with his friends and he plays loud music without headphones.
Therefore
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 it has significantly reduced my focus on my studies.
Moreover
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, he smokes in a common shared place and I have an allergy to cigarette smoke,
thus
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 despite my attempts to explain
this
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 issue to him. Unfortunately, he did not show any consideration of my concern.
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, I am having a mid-term exam next month, I must study hard to clear the exams.
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, it would be greatly appreciated if you could relocate my accommodation or pairing with other final-year students who have a compatible lifestyle. Thanks for the prompt response to my concern and waiting for your response. Kind regards, RK

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Make sure to include a clear introductory sentence that states the purpose of your letter more explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using clearer transitions between your ideas to improve the flow of the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Check for punctuation and spacing to make your writing more polished, particularly around commas and periods.
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The letter has a polite tone, which is appropriate for correspondence with an administrator.
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You have clearly outlined the issue you are facing with your roommate.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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