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Many people think that there are more advantages to have no children, while some people think that having a child is necessary. State your opinion.

I think that having a
child
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 is necessary. It is not just important to an individual, but
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 to the society.
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, mentally speaking, for an individual, having a
child
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 could mean that the family is being more comprehensive, their bloodline can be carried on, it is like a natural instinct that they fulfilled. They could learn to take up the responsibility to the upbringing of a
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, to take the role of being parents. It is
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 a proving of a couple’s relationship and a way to maintain the relationship.
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, having
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child
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children
a child
 can often provide the individual a better and relaxing time when they get older, as their
child
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 can take care of them as a return. When they get old there is someone beside them,
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 of being alone and pass away alone. For an individual, having a
child
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 mean that the parents have to bear the responsibility to take care of the
child
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. Individuals will improve their life skills. They have to have a better planning not just for themselves, but
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 for the
child
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,
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, they have to learn to set a budget of their finances. They have to help their
child
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 to apply for studies. To the society, it is important to increase the birth rate. The aging population is serious worldwide, having a
child
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 can help increase the future working force, so as to maintain the economic and social development of a country. The present information and resources can be inherited and improved by the future generation. Some people may say that it very costly to have a
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 and people can’t enjoy a more materialistic life.
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, having a
child
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 can actually bring a lot of happiness as well, it is something that money cannot give to individuals,
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, the sense of altruism and responsibility developed in an individual, they can feel a bigger sense of achievement and mission.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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