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having more money and Leicester time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#money #leicester #time
Money and
time
 matters more in
this
 present era. Some people believe that earning more income and having very less
time
 is far better than poor financial stability and enough free
time
.
This
 will discuss both thoughts before arriving to my opinion.
To begin
 with, possessing more money and less
time
 have both benefits and drawbacks. As considering the advantage, people having good financial background can you gain any any type of expensive facilities which makes humans always excited. In the present days, many business tycoons and their families live luxurious life without worrying about daily needs.
However
, the major disadvantage is that these types of business people do not get enough quality
time
 together with their family which built relationship gaps among parents and children. On contrary, people who
are fin
Suggestion
the contrary
ancially backward having suitable free
time
 have a strong family
support
 due to their proper interaction with the family members. But the drawback is that, they should work hard to earn daily bread for their family that makes the respective individuals more stressful. Example, many middle class families is suffering
this
 situation that sometimes makes some physically and mentally weak. Even though they work hard to
support
 their daily life coma the job frustrations can bust out by family care and
support
. In my opinion, relation's
support
 is more valuable than any amount of money and family always makes a person complete and satisfied.
Thus
, having less money and enough
time
 to spare for relationship bonds is more suitable lifestyle. To conclude, both viewpoints have pros and cons
such
 as some individuals have enough income, but not happy relationships, whereas others enjoy the beauty of family with low income.
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