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Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers , others disagree. discuss both views and opinion.

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Nowadays, some people say that the best
gift
 given to a teenager is money, but some of them do not agree with
this
 statement.
However
, sometimes it is very difficult to buy a present to a young girl/boy and
this
 is harder if we do not know their interests or preferences.
Furthermore
, many people choose the "money" option because they are thinking that
this
 kind of present would make them feel happy so probably
this
 could bring a smile on a teenager's face too. With money, adolescents can buy whatever they need or collect it in their "dreams jar".
Moreover
 is the easiest way of giving a
gift
 without consuming time on thinking what to buy.
Although
,
on the other hand
, others think that
this
 is not an alternative. The most perfect
gift
 anyone could get is something that it remains palpable, and reminds them of the person they got it from. Big or small gifts are the same as long as they have a meaning. I believe that receiving a noticeable, visible
gift
 could be more overwhelming and heart touching than cash. I, personally, always have been very joyful when I have got some hand made or bought a present from my friends because it made me realise that I am important to them and they want to make me feel loved. In conclusion, everyone should think twice before buying a present to their loved ones, and
instead
 of bill, have more options. People should be happy for the things that
last
,
instead
 of things that come and go.

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