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the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon

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The stages that a large marine animal known as
salmon
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 experienced before being mature are illustrated in the diagrams. It is clearly seen from the picture that the average
life
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 expectancy of a
salmon
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 lasts approximately 10 years. Mature salmons tend to lay eggs in the upper part of a
river
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, so that the flow speed is ensured as minimal. In the
first
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 period in the
life
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 cycle,
salmon
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 eggs are hidden in pebbly seeds
on
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in
 the
river
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 bed for about five or six months before the new
salmon
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 hatch out these eggs. A newborn
salmon
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, called as ‘fry’, is between 3 and 8
centimeters
a metric unit of length equal to one hundredth of a meter
centimetres
 in length and move along the flow of the
river
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 to the lower
river
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, where the water flow is faster and stronger. In the downstream,
salmon
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 continue its
life
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 cycle for about 4 years. After the development of nearly 5 years, the length of a current
salmon
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 called ‘
smolt
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’ is between 12 to 15
centimeters
a metric unit of length equal to one hundredth of a meter
centimetres
. And in the period of the
next
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 5 years, the
smolt
the highest level or degree attainable; the highest stage of development
summit
 has been developed into adult
salmon
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, which is about 70 to 76
centimeters
a metric unit of length equal to one hundredth of a meter
centimetres
 long, and continued its
life
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 in the area of open sea.
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, adult salmons are old enough to spawn which commences a progress of a new
salmon
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 generation.

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