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Some people agree that children should ask for parent’s advice. Some disagree. Discuss both views and share your opinion.

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Its
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It
 is undeniable, that whether young generation should take
advice
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 from elders or not. Some believe that
advice
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 from elder's is mandatory.
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, others think that it has an adverse effect on children. In
this
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 essay, examine both the views in detail and put forward evidences why I support the perspective of asking parental help. Parental
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 has played a crucial role in the physical and mental development of the growing child.
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, the children's behaviour and respect to the others is important to learn, that's taught by only parents.
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 knowledge never get from school education.
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, they need
advice
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 for higher education and job career from guardians.
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, education make them capable to in front of other competitors and get top position. But, to reach that position
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 from elder's and guidance is much valuable and essential to walk on that right path. Another reason is that,
advice
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 from parent's rescue from going on wrong track.
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, giving knowledge about the time important, most of them waste time on watching and on social media.
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, few suggest that the younger should take their decisions by own.
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, constant
advice
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 for everything make them more dependent. Or else, they lose their thinking power and ability to take important
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 by themselves.
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, a survey from the USA hospital that depending on others, reduce the capability of the brain.
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, taking
decision
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 by own make them more stable and think twice if their
decision
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 goes wrong and work more on that, which not increase sharpen the mind but
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 increase knowledge. In conclusion, many of them disagree on that of giving
advice
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 to their child, but others think
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advice
Suggestion
the advice
 is change the vitality among others if they are own detrimental side.
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, in my opinion, children should rely on parent's
advice
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, but they
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 should try to take some
decision
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 of their own.

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