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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates
people
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 in the U.S.A ate
fast-food
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in fast-food
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 shops between 2003,2006 and 2013 how frequently.
Overall
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, throughout the surveyed year, most Americans ate fast moderately,
while
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 the percentage of
people
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ate
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who ate
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 every day
and
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apply
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never remained low. In 2003, the highest number of
people
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 ate fast food once a week at about 33%,
while
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 in 2006, the highest amount of
people
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 ate fast food once or twice a month
is
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similar to 33%.
However
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, the lowest ratio of
people
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 ate fast food every day and never. There had seen a
fluctuation
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 state between
people
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 who ate several times a week. The percentage of eating fast foods a few times a year among individuals has increased in the year
of
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apply
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2006 and 2013.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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