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Use of internet for shopping and information – Advantages and disadvantages

#internet #information
In
this
 modern era, usage of internet bloomed unimaginable. People’s lifestyle has taken a different dimension of
growth
, specifically in shopping and knowing details around them. Extensive use of
website
Suggestion
the website
websites
 and mobile application has undoubtedly brought immense
growth but
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growth, but
also
 accompanied with certain disadvantages. Internet usage has provided many advantages which leads to
complete change
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a complete change
 in their nature of shopping and their outlook knowledge. To illustrate, post internet era human preferred in-person shopping which obviously incur time and
energy but
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energy, but
 nowadays just mobile is sufficient to complete a new year family purchase of any kind.
Additionally
, on those past days one had to search
yellow pages
Suggestion
the yellow pages
 for a specific address which might not be an updated
address but
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address, but
 in
this
 contemporary period just a simple google search is enough to bring any up-to-date address in any part of the world within seconds. As every coin has two sides,
digitalization
the administration of digitalis for the treatment of certain heart disorders
digitalisation
 has
also
 paved way for potential security risk and privacy threats. Due to the lack of online security details more and more people has lost their hard earned money to credit card scams.
Secondly
, people, without a
second
 thought, shared their complete personal details which resulted in many privacy breaches.
For example
, providing email and contact information can easily be compromised for email spamming and phishing. In conclusion, even though web
growth
 leveraged people lifestyle and culture to an another level, as a compliment, the evil side
also
 flourish
parallelly
being everywhere equidistant and not intersecting
parallels
 which
also
 impacted the society
growth
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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