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many students take partime jobs while studying in university , you think it’s a good idea or bad idea.

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In my view, it is really a good idea to partially
work
 while studying in university. Being at
work
, makes you more active to manage your finances, in a better way. Analysis shows that students working tend to behave responsibly, are disciplined and value their
time
. They even understand the importance of money being spent on pursuing higher studies. College studies
are expensive throughout the world and parents sometimes feel
Suggestion
sometimes expensive throughout the world and parents feel
have expensive throughout the world and parents sometimes felt
are expensive throughout the world and parents sometimes feel
 buried off, paying the same. Being an adult
,
Accept space
,
 it will be wiser if kids learnt to start sharing the load. Many part
time
 jobs are offered in
university
Suggestion
the university
 itself so that students can make up for their expenses.
a
Suggestion
A
 friend of mine while studying in Birmingham worked as a cashier during
weekend
Suggestion
a weekend
the weekend
weekends
 in
supermarket
Suggestion
the supermarket
supermarkets
a supermarket
. He was able to make enough money within
this
 weekend
job
 to pay for his monthly rent. He was
also
 appreciated by his family for his hard
work
.
This
 changes our attitude and brings in us confidence, to be ready for
actual fulltime
Suggestion
the actual full time job
actual full time job
an actual full time job
job
. It is quite beneficial to procure your secondary
job
 in
similar field
Suggestion
a similar field
similar fields
 of aspiring future role. Lets take an example you are studying engineering and you are part
time
 working in
construction company
Suggestion
a construction company
 so you will definitely quickly related your theoretical
work
 with practical experience.
This
 will
further
 enhance your capability to learn complex subjects faster and on
time
. Getting good grades will bring you
further
 closer to grabbing your dream
job
. In the conclusion, students should showcase their other abilities learnt in their resume. These small things will add
further
 to your
skillset
Suggestion
skill set
. Nowadays companies prefer to hire people who can adapt with multiple roles as per requirement. In
future
Suggestion
the future
 even if your industry crashes you still have experience to apply for other jobs.
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