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Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age?

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THERE IS A BILIEF THAT IT IS A GOOD IDEA TO ALLOW KIDS TO AT HOME AND SPEND THEIR TIME PLAYING UNTIL THEY GROW UP TO THE AGE OF SIX OR SEVEN. ANOTHER KIND OF PEOPLE THINK THAT IT IS BETTER TO ATTEND
SCHOOL
 THEIR KIDS IN THE EARLY YEARS. IN MY POINT OF VIEW, KIDS HAD BETTER TO START THEIR EDUCATION BY ATTENDING INSTITUTE URGENTLY, BECAUSE THERE IS A POINT THAT PEOPLE ARE ABLE TO LEARN EVERYTHING AS MUCH AS THEY CAN IN THE
CHILDHOOD
 WITH FRESH MEMORY.
FIRST
 BENEFIT, KIDS WILL EFFECTIVELY LEARN THINGS IN SURROUNDING WORLD,
AS A RESULT
 THEY WILL NOT HAVE ANY DIFFICULTIES IN STUDIES, BECAUSE MOST OF THINGS THEY HAVE LEARNT IN
CHILDHOOD
 AND IT WILL HELP THEM TO INCREASE THEIR KNOWLDEGDE MORE AND MORE WITHOUT HARD WORKING.
FOR INSTANCE
, IF A KID LEARNED CHINEESE LANGUAGE AT THE AGE OF 6, , HE OR
SHE
Suggestion
,
 WILL EASILY LEARN OTHER LANGUAGES WITHOUT ANY ASSISTANCE.
SECOND
 BENEFIT, IF A KID STARTED STUDYING AT
SCHOOL
 FROM A YOUNG AGE, HIS OR HER WORLDVIEW WILL BE MORE WIDE AND AWARE OF MOST THINGS IN THE WORLD WHICH ARE ESSENTIAL IN OUR DAILY LIFE.
FOR INSTANCE
, WHEN A KID
FIRST
 STARTED HIS EDUCATION IN
SCHOOL
, HE OR SHE WILL LEARN WRITING, READING AND THE BASE SUBJECTS WHICH ARE IMPORTANT IN THE EARLY PERIODS OF A KID. IN CONCLUSION, IF I HAD TO SAY ABOUT THE ATTENDING
SCHOOL
 A KID IN THE EARLY
CHILDHOOD
, I WOULD PROBABLY SAY THAT IT IS A GOOD IDEA, BECAUSE THEY HAVE A GREAT ABILITY TO LEARN THINGS AS MUCH AS THEY CAN IN THE
CHILDHOOD
 AND IT WILL HELP THEM TO AVOID ANY KIND OF DIFFICULTIES DURING THEIR STUDIES AT
SCHOOL
, AND THEIR KNOWLEDGE AND WORLD VIEW WILL CONSIDERABLY WIDE
IN CONTRAST
 TO OTHER KIDS WHO SPEND TIME FOR PLEASURE ACTIVITIES AND PLAYING SOME KIND OF GAME IN THE
CHILDHOOD
.

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