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It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together.

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Modern
technology
 and traditional culture may seem like two completely opposite
subject
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subjects
 to some people. But in today’s world these two subjects are more related to each other than you could possibly imagine. In
this
 essay I will discuss how for keeping traditions alive these days we need to include
technology
.
Technology
 has been a part of our daily
lives
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life
 for decades now and even though it doesn’t always have positive impacts on us it can help us with many different things including keeping different traditions alive. It’s obvious that
technology
 has made our lives
easier but
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easier, but
this
 does not mean that it has cut out some parts of our past. Modern
technology
 actually helps us keep our cultures and traditions alive by making it easier for us to communicate. There probably will come a time that some traditions have been
forgotten but
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forgotten, but
 we cannot blame the
technology
 for that because it is mostly us humans that keep a tradition
that is
 dear to us alive and the
technology
 helps with that by giving us the ability to search for our identity and culture.
For example
, the new identity tests help you understand where you are from and by the help of the internet you can search about the traditions.
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 things considered, many traditions will most definitely be forgotten in the
next
 centuries. But if a tradition is dear to
us we
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us, we
 can help keep it alive by using advanced
technology
 and communicating with each other on social media platforms.

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