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Some people believe that happiness can be achieved by materialistic goals. How far is it true.

Some people think that by pursuing materialistic goals in
life
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 we can achieve
happiness
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. It is true that materialistic things give a
happiness
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, but that
happiness
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 is not long lasting. People with non materialistic
life
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 goals report greater satisfaction in
life
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 than those who pursue more materialistic aims. There are various factors that can play into a person's ability to create
happiness
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. Materialistic goals, create a spiral of higher goals, more stress and less connection.
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, if an employee gets promoted as a manager of the company, ultimately he accomplished a goal set by him and a higher level of status in office as well as in society, in that situation he feels extremely happy.
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, now he will think that to maintain his lifestyle in society, for that he will buy a more expensive car, have to move to a better neighbourhood. And, in return, he need to keep working hard to maintain his status level. In the result, his stress level increased, he feels depressed and anxious. Undoubtedly, pursuing a materialistic goals gives a
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happiness but
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happiness, but
 it is a temporary
happiness
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 and in result, it enhances the pressure, work load, tension and hurdles in
life
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.
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, non materialistic
life
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 goals beneficial to the people. It gives a great sense of satisfaction from volunteering our time without any financial rewards.
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, helping other creatures, meaning and meaning creates contentment. And
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 a harmonious family
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. By ensuring that we spend our leisure time in comfortable surroundings and with people we enjoy being without any tension. To conclude, definitely by following materialistic goals and by achieving it, gives a
happiness
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 which could not
last
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 long and in result gives anxiety.
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 of that, non materialistic goals, create an inner satisfaction in
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 and gives a
happiness
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 to our soul.

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