Many countries have the same shops and products. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days, communications are getting better so that, we can see not only the brand products but

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some special handicrafts in several countries, yet some

people

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believe that happened is not good, but other

people

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have different thinks.

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, I have the same opinion as the first group, for if the countries just sales own

goods

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then

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the sales are reduced, and other

people

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cannot access every product. On the one hand, if the products are supplied in the world,

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have some benefits.

Firstly

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this

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good becomes global, so the sales and profits for companies or generators will increase.

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, the job positions are opening.

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, the economic level of society rose.

Thirdly

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, we have completion with produce, so the quality of

goods

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is growing , and costs declined.

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, we need a phone that has good options at a low price now we can buy cellphones from various brands

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as Samsung, Apple, and LG.

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, we must check their phone and buy the best phone.

On the other hand

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this

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has some demerits when the other regions have

goods

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like us. In these

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, the tourist industry has a bad position and falling because

people

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can find the things that need in their districts.

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, native income decreased.

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, you need Iranian handicrafts, but you live in Canada. In

this

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position buy your

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, yet you don’t travel to Iran so you do not pay for Hotel, flight, and other things. In conclusion,

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the products in other countries are not good for inhabitants, it is good for most clients.

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grammar

Pay more attention to your grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity. For example, 'but other people have different thinks' should be 'but other people have different opinions'.

structure

Work on ensuring each paragraph has a clear main idea that is supported by specific examples or evidence. This will make your argument stronger and more coherent.

detail

Try to develop the counterarguments more fully. The essay touches on detriments but does not elaborate on them sufficiently.

content

The essay clearly identifies two sides of the argument and presents a personal opinion, which is good practice for task response.

example

You include some relevant examples, such as mentioning Samsung, Apple, and LG, which illustrates understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

266 words

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Many countries have the same shops and products. Some consider it a positive development, whereas others consider it negative. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Some people say that modern technology has made shopping today easier, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.