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Climate change is an issue. Do you agree with this?

#climate #change
Clothes
 are not very important to me, but I want them to be comfortable. I normally wear casual
clothes
,
such
 as a T-shirt and jeans. I don't think I wore the traditional
clothes
 of my culture, but some of my friends did because they were doing traditional dances in school. I don't usually go to any clothing shop to buy new
clothes
.
Instead
, I do online shopping. I used to wear uniforms when I was in primary and high school, and I have
also
 worn uniforms when I was in military service. I think that only a limited number of people follow fashion because
both
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you must be keen on fashion and you must have enough money to buy
clothes
 which fashion promotes. I almost
use
 my computer every
day
. I am generally online about 5 hours a
day
 via mobile phone or computer. I prefer laptops because they
weight
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are
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 light, and so you can take
it
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them
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 anywhere you want. I
use
 computers for dealing with a task,
such
 as doing research for a class. I
also
use
 it for entertainment,
such
 as watching films and serials. It is very important to know how to
use
 a computer properly because at
this
 age almost everything is connected
with
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to
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 computers.
For example
, thanks to computers, you can both deal with your
works
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work
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 and connect with your
beloved
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loved
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 ones and have fun. It depends on whether or not it is a working
day
. On working days, I wake up at 8 in the morning. On weekends, I wake up whenever I want. On weekdays, I generally have a routine. I wake up, take a shower, have breakfast, go to work and return to my place. I sometimes change my daily routine. If it is a weekday, and I am on leave that
day
, I probably break the routine and have fun doing something I like. No, my daily routine
has been
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was
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 different
when
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from when
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 I was a child because I was neither studying nor working. I just used to play games and watch cartoons all
day
. It depends on who you are and what you are doing. If you are not a very busy person and have a very busy schedule, it is better to have a routine for managing your time wisely.
On the other hand
, if the situation is not like that, you don't need to do the same thing every
day
 at the same time because it is boring, and it may lead you to depression.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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