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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teachign sports to younger children).

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Some people claim that teenagers should take part in society services and it should be mandatory for high school programmes. I agree with
this
 idea.
Firstly
, I will explain
this
 idea how beneficial to students to experience in business life and
secondly I
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secondly, I
 will explore what is the positive sides of
this
 suggestion for teenagers' mental development. One the one hand, to
work
 for charity for teenagers can be useful for both society and themselves. Teens can be experienced and
this
 situation might help them when they graduate from schools because many employers seek for a qualified person when they need an employee.
Furthermore
, students can be informed about different kinds of occupations as they
work
 for people in a wide range of jobs. In
this
 way, they can learn some things about their career aims and interests before going to university, they can determine what to do in the future. One the other hand, working for community can improve their personalities,
such
 as a sense of responsibility. When students can have more responsibilities, they must enforce themselves to manage their time and organize their lives between studies and
work
.
Moreover
, they can learn empathising with other people.
For instance
, a student who works for elderly people will understand older people's issue more.
Also
,
this
work
 might help them socialize with other people because when they
work
 for the society they are exposed to meet other people. In conclusion, whereas I think that it is not right to enforce anyone to do something, there are a lot of advantages of working in high schools for both community and students
.
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.
Therefore I
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Therefore, I
 agree with the idea of unpaid community services should be obligated in high schools.

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