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Some people believe that they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree with the above notion? You should write at least 250 words.

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Every government has several
tax
 rules, so citizens should pay their taxes.
However
, some people believe they should keep all their
money
 and they don'
t
 pay taxes. Paying the
tax
 is the responsibility of an individual to contribute in the progress of the nation.
This
 essay will take on the positive aspects these taxes can have and
also
 the negative effects if people don'
t
 pay taxes. Evidence suggests every state has a lot of cost to improve some facilities
such
 as transportation and the reliable medical system. Every city need develop the road and change the buildings.
Tax
 is one of form to solve that problem. Every citizen use that facilities
for example
, they go to the work by bus. If buses have a problem or there are old, they couldn'
t
 go to a job and make
money
. To illustrate that, in every society, when people use something, they should pay
money
 for that. Responsible people pay for any facilities.
Moreover
, a certain part of
this
tax
 amount is being used for the needy people.
However
, some people believe they work hard and make wealth so
money
 is yours and it is not for government.
Furthermore
, the state can change how they give
tax
 from people. To illustrate
this
, when some people start their work, they don'
t
 pay
tax
. After some times when they have some wealth and manage their life, they pay taxes. Summery, considering that point discussed above,
tax
 is one of the ways that states can fix the community problem.
However
, government should consider the citizens condition.

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