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Many people work long hours, leaving every little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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It is indeed true that, these days people are too busy to spend
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 for other activities than their job.
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,
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, there is a relatively big group who spend much of their
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 to
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 of some hobbies. While, I accept that, they might have their valid reasons, I believe that, disadvantages are considerably bolder than its benefits.
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 with, leisures, those activities which people are willing to do and enjoy a lot, are truly required for mental and physical development. To have a healthier body, It is proved that, the body should have a rest after a few hours working, depending on people’s age and capacity and level of their health, but it is absolutely, needed. It
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, helps to release stress and tension after a busy
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 at the office. As a personal example, I would admit that, when I spend
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 in front of the TV or even cooking, I relax and have fun and get energy for my
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day
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. I believe that, it makes my body ready for another busy
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.
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, from my point of view, I think that,
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 is part of a life not the whole, meaning, it should not be dominant almost all possible times. Having seen my uncle as a workaholic person, I have learned that, it is not a positive trend in the life. He used to
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 more than 12 hours a
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, now when he is in his 80’s, he almost regrets not having leisure activities. Since, he thought that he needs money for his leisures, but when he got money, it was too late to be able to do and
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, enjoy. In conclusion, I, once again, would argue that,
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 is one key factor to be mentally and physically healthy, but in a balance. If someone dedicates most of her/ his
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 working, undoubtedly, it works adverse, and working endanger the mental and physical health of people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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