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In the past lecturers could teach a certain number of students in one lecture hall. With the development of new technology, it is hard to justify the reason to participate in the lecture physically and not via the internet.

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Previously, professors could give lessons to a certain number of people, who study at University, in one auditorium. With the noticeably increasing of opportunities of telecommunications, there is a difficulty in justifying the cause to take part in the lessons physically and not through the network.
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, In my point of view, there are sufficient number of benefits what provides the internet. If we have any problem with transporting or we have to stay at home because of the illness,
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 broken arm or leg and we had better to stay home
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 our health will become worse.
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 is one point which informs us that it is a good way not to miss the lessons in the case we ill.
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, I think there is no point to take part in lessons physically, whereas we can do it via the internet which is very convenient,
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, if the weather is scorching enough, in most cases
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 happens without a doubt, and the lecture hall becomes hot and there will not be enough fresh air,
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, it makes us feel exhausted and not effective and taking lessons through the Internet help us to avoid
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 kind of tricky situations. In conclusion, If I had to say about taking part in lesson physically, I would probably say that lessons given via the Internet are much better than participating in the lecture physically, because as I said it is a superb way to get rid of uncomfortable conditions
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 as scorching weather, which make us lazy and tired. And we should adapt to
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 kind of innovations and make a contribution for the improvement of the technologies, because it provide us with all kinds of opportunities what makes our living much easier and more comfortable than before.

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