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Some people think that economic progress is the only way to measure a country's success, while others that think that there are other factors which can be used to measure a country's success. What are these factors? Which, of all factors, do you think are most important?

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Advancing
economy
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 is one of indications
that is
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 to describe a
country
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's
success
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.
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, I think how live the citizens in the
country
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 is as important as
economy
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, because some of countries have been growing
economy
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, meanwhile they have a big gap between rich and poor people. I describe two factors about a
country
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's
success
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instead
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 of the growing
economy
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.
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rst component i
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The first component
A first component
s an average length of life.
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 expressed, how a superior medical treatment and how is well-being people are in that
country
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.
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, in one of the states in U.S., they have to pay a tax for an obesity. They promote how a
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 food and oily cuisines af
fect t
produce
effect
o the body. It would know how the politics care about their health. Being a health is one of the important factors for progressing a
country
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.
Se
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cond component i
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The second component
A second component
s a level of happiness of citizens. It is assessed about whether the place is safe, a livable
country
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 and supply a good education for children. I believe that if the people would like to live there, that
country
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 supposed to be
su
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ccess b
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successful
ecause the people sustain a
country
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.
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, Finland is known as a very high level of contentment. They could demand a good social security and a good quality education. Supplying a good social security means to be made into an institution of medical treatments. In conclusion, I think that a level of happiness of citizens is the most important factor for meeting with
success
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. A
country
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 is created by the citizens and
therefore
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 their satisfaction is a necessary factor.
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