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Some expert believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondry school.do the advantages of this outweight the disadvantage?

#expert #children #language #school #secondry #outweight
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for
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to
tecnology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
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,
as most articles and lectures is based on foreign
language
such
 as
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 and they have been put
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in different
 sites to use it is important to children to learn it as soon as possible.
the
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The
 question
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however
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is whether there could be
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advantages
 or disadvantage
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In
this
 essay I shall examine both sides of the argument. In my view
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this
 is one of the major reasons more people are
interest
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interested
 in their children learn another
language
 at primary
school
 is young children pick up languages much more easily than teenagers
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.
However
, it is important to consider at primary
school
 children have less homework to do.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 they have extra time to spend on learning
new
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a new language
new languages
language
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for
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For
instance they
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instance, they
might to be
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might be
use
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using
 film
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,
music
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,
books in
lessure
of less size or importance
lesser
leisure
 time to improve their knowledge in
foreign
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a foreign language
foreign languages
language
. In terms of the impact of teaching these lessons in primary
school
 it
could be take
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could take
could be taken
 all the time of day for checking the skill for children and they have been ignored to find another talent which they have and lead to be
person
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a person
the person
persons
 with limit ability who don't
workto
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work to
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 skills.
for
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For
example some
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example, some
 parents
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unfortunately
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 eager to more reading than playing for children in
spiretimes
 so that caused to
fujitive
someone who flees from an uncongenial situation
fugitives
 their child from
school
. I could argue that
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the benefits of learning
foreign
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a foreign language
foreign languages
language
 at primary
school
 can be
outweight
be heavier than
outweigh
outweighed
outweighs
 the disadvantage and put them before profit.
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