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Nowadays, children and teenagers spend more and more time indoors. What is the causes of this problem? What measures can be reduce this?

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In the contemporary world, spending more time on indoor activities has been a prevalent and
publicy
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
 phenomena amongst young generations. There are reasons to justify
this
 trend and actions should be taken to improve the situation. There are two main causes explaining why children and teenagers choose to stay
indoor
within a building
indoors
instead
 of going out.
Firstly
, students
receive
Suggestion
receives
 a huge amount of homework from their teachers during their school time.
As a result
, they would have to stay at home or in libraries to finish their tasks, leading to lack of open-air
excercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
.
Additionally
, schools tend to focus on academic subjects
such
 as
mathematic
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mathematics
, physics, literature and so on, while outdoor activities are considered not important to the future of children. In fact, in many countries, the only subject that includes an open space is physical education. Some immediate measures should be taken by schools and education systems to tackle
this problems
Suggestion
this problem
these problems
.
First
 to
mentioned
Suggestion
mention
, students should be
encourged
inspired with confidence
encouraged
 to participate in activities
such
 as visiting historical places, mountain climbing or volunteer and charity works. By getting their hands on various tasks, students could broaden their knowledge and improve their skills in numerous fields.
Moreover
, education systems should concentrate on holistic learning which involves not only theoretical knowledge but
also
 practical skills.
In other words
, students should be given chances to practice what they have been taught at schools. To conclude, spending more time indoors has
became
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become
 a heated
issues
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issue
 recently and it should be improved to
helps
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help
 children and teenagers to have comprehensive development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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