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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 modern world, it is observed by some politicians and authorities that some sportsmen/women have been earning huge amount of money than other crucial professions. Whereas some people believe that it is reasonable, others deny
this
 statement. I strongly support the idea that some professions
such
 as engineering or medical should have more important than the athletes and due to that reason I believe that paying sportsmen higher is proof of unfairness.
First
 of all, it is clearly known that the salary of a football or basketball player is significantly higher than a manager who works in a well-respected company. In fact, if we consider the physical effort which spends during the working hours (activities for sportsman/woman), the athletes burn more calories. In line with
this
 idea, it is reasonable that they could earn higher salaries.
Moreover
, successful sports people have
also
 acted in some commercials, so, we could call them as a celebrity.
For instance
, C.Ronaldo, he is not only a football player, but
also
 a famous brand-face for many pioneer companies.
On the other hand
, it is frequently stated by some economists that celebrities’ monthly incomes have been increasing rapidly,
instead
, the gap between all managers roles and between managers and staff should not be much.
In other words
, while an engineer works 15 hours every day to serve his community, his salary should not be lower than any other sports professionals.
Furthermore
, another most important professionals are doctors who save our lives.
Although
 they save a person’s life and contribute the society in many solid ways, how they earn lower than celebrities? In conclusion, in light of the information given above, it is obvious that there is a huge salary gap between the professions. I strongly believe that
this
 gap should be close to each other as much as possible to ensure that people’s social status is similar. I am convinced that well-known sports professionals’ salaries should not be higher than in other professions.
Also
, it should not be forgotten that
this
 situation is a proof of injustice.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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