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Nowadays celebrities are mainly famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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These days, prominent people are most famous for their looks and money can have negative impacts on the youth. I agree there are so many celebrities, who are popular for their riches and physical appearance, whereas few of them are famous for their accomplishments. The
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 group of people can have a positive impact on the current generation.
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, many stars are famous for their beauty or money and do bad things. A very good example for
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 is Luiz Suarez. The Uruguayan footballer, who is famous for the tackles and moves in the football ground, got so many red cards for attacking the co-players by biting and pushing. Even though the big clubs are rooting for the player, his personality is not a role model for the kids.
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, few prominent people are popular for the fame as well as the good deeds they do in the real life. Another example of
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 is Cristiano Ronaldo. The Paraguayan soccer player is famous for his breathtaking goals as well as the charity activities he do in the real life. Youth can take him as a role model; the player won the golden boot award consecutively for so many years,
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 to that, he is very active in helping the poor as well. In total, I agree there are certain famous people who are celebrating just for their wealth and glamour whereas few they are renowned for their other activities. Kids can certainly take these good eminent people as their epitome.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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