Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professionals. Some people think this is fully justified while others think, it is unfair. Discuss both the views and give your opinions.

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Nowadays, the
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ratio is quite high of people who have flourished career in sports field than other essential workers. Some people have positive views with
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justification and other think
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is unethical. I intend to delve both the aspects in detail with my opinion and conclusion at the end. To initiate with, there are many reasons of paying more
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, they have more responsibilities of nation than other people. People have huge expectations
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their favourite players in every game, and people pray for their victory every time, which becomes a great responsibility to play for their country’s people.
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, these sportsmen
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have to face some difficulties from other fans. If they failed to win the game anyhow, their fans start abusing and defaming them
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ignoring their previous performances. As an instance, a famous Indian cricketer Sachin
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is famous as ‘God of cricket’, and many people have his photograph in their own temple, which is because of his great achievements and love for his country. So, they truly deserve the
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salary which
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is paid by the government.
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, there are many employees beyond sportsmen
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as engineers, doctors, nurses, teachers, soldiers and many more who should be paid more than their current earnings. Doctors and nurses contribute their life to save other people, and by working everyday without taking leave. Freedom fighters and police are truly great who fights for their country
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every day
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their salaries are not sufficient for survival of their family. To illustrate, in India, there are many educated people who suicide everyday who failed to get
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and sufficient income. Government should take the responsibility to encourage these public servants by making some rules about their wages. To conclude, as per my opinion, sportsmen are well deserved to get high
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,
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other major workers should
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have satisfied income ratio to live their life.
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