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International travel is becoming coming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourist. Do the advantage of increased tourists outweigh disadvantages.

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There is no scepticism tourism is becoming increasingly popular as flying to another
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 has become more affordable than in the past.Personally speaking
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 kind of development has brought more advantages than the disadvantages. Despite the below drawbacks, the benefits of increased travel are more useful.To start with
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 and foremost positive aspect of tourism is that it has become a backbone of the nation's economy by paying large dividends to
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, tourists are the major source of income for many businesses based upon them
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 including, restaurants, travel agencies and transport system. Establishment of good relationship with other countries is another plus point of
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, good relation is prerequisite for developing trade between two countries and tourists are acting as a medium between two countries.
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, foreigners help in
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's financial status and developing a business
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opportunity
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mobility always comes to spreading many contagious diseases.It is recently seen the pandemic corona has become a more grimmer issue worldwide because of tourists.Another issue is that environments threatened by tourists
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 Many natural sites are destroyed by tourist.The Great Barries reef of Australia is a good example of
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 alarming situation. In conclusion, travellers bring a boost in economic and employment far outweigh than the minor defects that resulted from too much visitor in any
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