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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding the changes. Others, however think that changes is always a good thing. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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There has been an ongoing debate about the diversity which affects an individual. Some people prefer to live their
life
 in an atmosphere which provides them comfort as having experience of it.
However
, others think that
this
 diversity will help them to learn the new things. The essay will discuss my stance with arguments in below paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the predominant reason for the mankind wish to do the same time of
work
 throughout their
life
 as they are being afraid of trying new things. They think that they were not able to handle any challenges and want to spend their
life
 happily without creating stress of new
work
.
Moreover
, the mankind having
this
 type of attitude only because they want to give their priority to other tasks as well.
Although
 the laymen having more responsibilities apart from their
work
, having not able to manage the balance between them prefer to do the same things.
For example
, a person who ready to accept the new opportunity can change their location;
this
 will lead to many tampering.
On the other hand
, others think that some person is ready to grab the new opportunities. The
first
 reason is that it teaches them new skills and updates their knowledge. As to solve any situation people can use their mind and
this
 will help them to raise their self-esteem.
Furthermore
, another reason is that
this
 kind of nature will helps them to achieve their career goals easily.
However
,
this
 will demand more dedication and hard
work
, but they get the large incentive.
For instance
, the mankind who are ready to accept new changes will earn more money
this
 will provide them a luxurious
life
. In conclusion, the time spend by doing the same
work
 gives an individual ample amount of time, which used on other important one, while doing new things ones can learn new things and achieve future goals. As per my opinion,
this
 will totally depend on an individual’s choice.
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