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Topic: Some people believed that nowadays we have many career choices. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? Write at least 250 words.

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It is considered that in
this
 day and age, as people, we have so many options available for everything. One of them is a career. In my opinion, I partly agree that we have a long list to make our selection from about career. It is undeniable that, there is a rise in jobs nowadays, so there are more choices for people to choose. There are 2 main reasons for the expansion. The
first
 reason is the economic development. The world is now having the integration, tendency
,
Accept space
,
therefore
 many fields have never been known start to appear in our country. The other one is the demand of people. The more the world move forward, the more people need. Everything around us is changing and so do we. There are more and more things we need and many jobs are created to meet our needs. On the other side of the coin, most developing countries struggle with high unemployment or underemployment. Robot development industry is not a new field, the robot and advanced machine at the moment can do many work without people.
For example
, one can check the price by themselves and pay after shopping in the supermarket
instead
 of the cashier.
Furthermore
, students don’t have their own orientation before the end of high school.
Therefore
, it is confusing for them to choose whether to study in
this
 or that field. In conclusion, we are faced with a variety of options in most areas of life apart from career one.
However as
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However, as
 a student we should study harder for a bright future and a good living condition.
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