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Write a letter to a friend telling him about an interesting website you found. Tell your friend – How you found it?How it can help?How you use it?

#friend #website
Hello Joe, I am writing to tell you some intriguing findings I made recently when I was aimlessly browsing the internet. At that time, I found a very useful website that enables you to find the latest releases and ratings of your favourite artists,
such
 as Radiohead, Charlie XCX, Kendrick Lamar, etc. It is Rate Your
Music
. I highly recommend the subpage of the best albums of all time, because the album To Pimp the Butterfly is on the first page, surprisingly. I remember that
last
 week you told me you wanted to learn more
music
 genres from some
music
 critics and get some dark jokes similar to the critics of Pitchforks. So I can guarantee RYM can satisfy all your needs with the help of the detailed facts about the
music
 industry you want. Let me tell you how to use it efficiently.
First,
you can register a random account by using your email account or outside linking accounts. And
then
, you can smoothly log into your account to check the information about your stans by clicking the search bar and entering the key works you want to look for. Later on, I will attach the invitation link to you; please don't forget to receive my replies. Speak to you soon Shay
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General
In the future, make sure to proofread your work to catch minor errors like 'key works' instead of 'keywords' for a more polished letter.
General
You might consider simplifying some of the more complex sentences to aid in readability.
Task Achievement
You provided a thorough explanation of how the website can help and how to use it, which is important for a complete response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your greeting and closing were friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend, which helped establish a suitable writing tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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