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Television has had a significant influence on the culture of many societies. To what extent would you say that television has positively or negatively affected the cultural development of your society?

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Television
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 has made a big impact on culture development of many societies. Whether it was positive or negative, the fact that
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 has a significant influence on our life is indisputable. Since televisions were globally used after WWII, it has affected ways of entertaining, adapting knowledge of billions of people over the world. Before
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, newspaper and places
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 as theatre, cinema used to have a crucial spot in our culture. People used them as a way of entertaining and learning. But
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 can bring all of them to you just through a small screen at your own home. It affected people’s habit heavily. They did not go out to those places as they used to.
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 of that, people choose to watch movies, dramas, etc.. At home.
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 created a new tradition within families – gathering to watch tv at night, which is still happening today. But because of its own convenience, televisions
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 affected negatively to its users. Production companies can’t no longer ignore the profit
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 will bring through advertisements.
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, they will have to make their products to fit the screen time, which lead to the need of releasing a cut-version of the movies. And to maximize the profit, some companies decide to make their content friendlier to the younglings, which lead to a lazy way of making movies for the audience on
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.
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, some countries which have huge industries of entertainment can affect negatively to a foreign audience. The popularity of American shows exemplifies
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 precisely. The violent and sexual contents of many American movies could leave audiences with a bad impression of the country and the culture in the movies. Foreign viewers, especially youngsters, might think what happened in these shows base on what happened in real life.
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 has changed our life once and for all. It changed our ways of entertaining, many TV shows even changed our point of view about things around us, from science to politics, etc... Even with the rise of mobile phone,
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 will still remain its dominant role.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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