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You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter: say what the problem is describe the accommodation you thought you were getting ask the provider to solve the problem

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Dear Mean, Hope you are doing great.
First
 of all, let me thank you for your help in finding
an
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accommodation and other facilities. Sincerely, you have done a great job in finding a home to stay as a paying guest, as per my budget. But, I’m sorry to say that, I do not think I can continue here, in
this
 stay-home. The owner and the family are so caring and they are good
in
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 giving privacy. That part is okay. But, they have a small kid of 1.5 years old. He is so cute, perhaps being of
this
 age, he cries continuously at night time. As
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 I have only
night
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 to study, I find it’s difficult to continue here. I’m okay with the budget as well as the food they provide. But, I need a more convenient place, quiet enough for my studies. In fact, I wanted to stay as a paying guest despite
of
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staying in a hostel, because
of
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this
 reason. I am always concerned about my privacy and determined in
studies
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. Please arrange another place within
this
 budget. It is okay
,
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 if I have to add a few more to the current amount. Please find a place as soon as possible, before my exam dates are announced. Looking forward to
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 from you Your’s faithfully Jahangir
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Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.

In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.

In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.

Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.

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