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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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In recent years, the number of people who decided to
study
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 abroad has increased significantly. Most of these students are high school graduates who would like to earn a university
degree
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. Studying abroad brings a number of benefits. Students who
study
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abroad have
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abroad has
 to live on their own, so they can learn how to survive without support from parents, making young adults become more mature.
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 to
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, these students are required to master their
second
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 language skills.
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, Asian students have to be able to write
academic essay
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academic essays
an academic essay
 in English if they want to earn a
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 in English speaking countries. These students are likely to get a high-paid jobs when they are back to their home countries as they can communicate in English.
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 abroad
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 allows students to have more choices of academic subjects.
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, there are more choices of art schools in Europe more than in Thailand, so doing a
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 in fashion design in Europe would lead to more options for academic support.
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, there are some drawbacks of studying abroad. Students who
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 abroad have to pay for their accommodation and plane tickets, while students who
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 in their home countries can live with their parents and do not have to travel abroad by plane in order to do a university
degree
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. Some students who
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 abroad may experience culture shock or lack of support from family. Some of them may find it difficult to make new foreign friends. To sum up, studying abroad has its pro and cons. Students who would like to
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 abroad should consider all of these advantages and disadvantages before making a decision whether to
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 abroad or not.
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