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The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.

The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries Spain, Turkey, Ireland, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.
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The table chart depicts that information about expenditure consumers on food, clothes, and leisure in five countries, Spain,
Turkey
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,
Ireland
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, Sweden, and Italy in 2002.
Overall
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, a glance at
this
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 given table reveals that
while
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the
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Turkey
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 and
Ireland
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 had the largest proportion in terms of food, the people living in Italy had the largest spending percentage on clothing.
In contrast
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, Spina had the lowest proportion in education.
To begin
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,
Turkey
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 and
Ireland
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 spent around 30% of their total income on food,
while
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 other countries used less than 20% of their
money
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 in the same category.
However
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, around 6% of the total
money
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 of
Turkey
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 and
Ireland
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 was gone on
the
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clothing, compared with around 10 % for
this
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 figure in Italy.
On the other hand
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, all countries
excepting
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 Spain spent more than 2% of their aggregate
money
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 on
the
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education, but Spain spent under 2 percentage of its total
money
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words turkey, ireland, money with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depicts" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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