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Student today can access information online, so, libraries are not necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#student #access #information #libraries
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Many divergent views exist on the importance of accessing
information
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 online or from libraries. A great number of people, including myself are of the opinion that, libraries are no longer needed since facts can easily be gathered online. In the following paragraphs, I will provide the rationale for my viewpoints as well as proffer justification for my own opinion. The primary reason upon which my belief is based that
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internet
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the internet
 has as much if not more
information
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 readily available. It goes without saying that, nowadays, the
internet
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 is updated daily resulting in it being current and relevant.
For instance
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,
newspapers
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newspaper
 articles and other reading materials are posted online daily to make it more accessible. Unsurprisingly, a 2019 social experiment conducted by a group of researchers from the University of Toronto, Canada found that
internet
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 is
most valuable source
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the most valuable source
a most valuable source
 to get up-to-date
information
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 about the world. Needless to say, some websites are more worthy of access
information
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 than libraries. Not only does the
internet
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 lead to quick access to up-to-date
information
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, but it
also
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 only takes us a step away to find anything
such
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 as books, encyclopedia, and dictionaries. It stands to
reasons
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reason
 that more and more students are
buying reading
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buying, reading
 books for their classes or for leisure time from using
online search engine
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online search engines
an online search engine
 like Amazon and eBay. My university course mate, Ben, is a shining example of
this
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, Ben, who came from a remote town, where he did not go to the library. He was using only e-books for reading materials.
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, he got 1st position in class To sum up, I hold to the opinion that libraries are outdated and not suitable to meet the challenging needs of
young generation
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the young generation
.
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, the
internet
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 is a best way for everybody to access necessary resources because it provides convenience and cost effective
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