In some countries, the number of people using bikes as main transport mode is decreasing, even though it is so beneficial why is this so how can people and courage to use more bicycles.

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the whole world. Gone are the days,
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give preference to other transport modes like
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and bikes  In
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essay, I will highlight some reasons
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phenomenon and suggest ways to motivate
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more
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. There are many reasons for not using
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bicycle
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in today's world.The first and foremost reason is the car and public transport is very lucrative as compared to
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because it saves our
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travelling.
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, the current century witnessed tremendous advancements in technology.
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heavy traffic so
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are no saving.
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want to show off their status.
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majority of
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give preference to using bikes
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of
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. There are many ways to motivate
people
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to
use
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the
bicycle
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. One approach is
the
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to impose
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tax on these types of vehicles like car, buses and so on so that individuals give preference to
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which is very beneficial for health. Another approach is, the
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is a cheap and green mode of transport. Media
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to
use
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and the administration can motivate
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generation by organising new camps in schools and colleges and
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of
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a nutshell. It can be concluded everything has its own importance under the sun and
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is one of them. The government can implement some effective steps to promote the
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of
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