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Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Capital
punishment
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 is like a dead end for a criminal. It is only sanctioned by the state after which, mostly there is no hope of revival for the person being accused. Many,
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however claim
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however, claim
 that it should not be used as a form of
punishment
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, whereas, I believe that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Capital
punishment
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 is the most extreme step taken
for
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 a
crime
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.
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, it should not be used in every other case. Giving someone a death sentence should only be allowed in the most severe cases like murder or rape. The motive of sentencing someone to death is not to kill that person because of his or her crimes, but it is to make other people aware of the laws and the power of the state. People with
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 power ensure that whosoever even thinks of committing
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 a
crime
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 knows what the repercussions would be. If the criminal is not being given strict
punishment
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 and is let free, it not only gives him an incentive to commit
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 a
crime
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 again but
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 makes other people take the judiciary lightly. By not punishing the criminal, the state
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 does not do justice to the victim. The victim or its family, after a
crime
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 relies only on the judiciary for a strict action against the criminal so that
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 a task in not repeated again in future. To conclude, I would like to say that if there is no form of
punishment
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 or a very light
punishment
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 for a
crime
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, it encourages not just the criminal, but other people to do the same in the hope of getting away easily.
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, in my opinion, capital
punishment
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 is a must if a country wishes to become
crime
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 free.
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