Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, celebrities earn a good amount of income by entertaining audience in a positive or a negative way. But many people argue that, they influence the community a lot so that it can be worthwhile to pay them high amount. As every coin has two different sides, I would

also

partially agree and disagree with the statement. The entertainment world has changed the way of life in many ways,

such

as we can watch, listen, enjoy and see our favourite celebrities movies, serials, web-series and advertisements.

However

, its influence and inspire a lot that we always pretend to be like them because of their on-screen performances and off-screen behaviour with people.

For instance

, I have seen

such

celebrities whom have contributed and raised funds for natural calamities, pandemic fight against various diseases and so on.

Also

, they promote our nation internationally. Albeit, they have some negative influence on the young generation.

Moreover

, teenagers imitate the bad sides of the celebrities

such

as, they try to adapt their drinking and smoking habits which can drive them on a wrong path.

Besides

, they demand and force their parents to buy the clothes and gadgets as they see on-screen. Unfortunately, they spend their majority of time behind

this

unrealistic world rather than on their education or technological creation or moderation. Apart from

this

, government servants need to be paid more than celebrities as they serve the whole nation in many ways. Celebrities should have been paid for what they deserve to be and the rest budget has to be allocated for educational purposes. All in all, I personally believe that entertainers deserve to be paid

accordingly

their good efforts and strong contents among the audience. They could not have been paid too much for irrelevant and off the target contents which can have a negative impact on the audience.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

306 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As a result of electronic inventions such the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Now the machine is very complex, and a lot of difficult work is automated p. Do benefits are more than drawbacks