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: It is a good idea for teenagers to have jobs while they are still students. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is believed that working while still studying is a good idea for teens. Because meeting many kind of people while working is a good way to know the society.
Besides
 that, wage, which is earned from the spot, can be motivation for them to work harder. Many young people want a salary, which could make their life become better, so that working hard to make money can help them become more independent.
However
, everything has both good and bad sides. Focus on part-time job can distract students from learning, and they may be failing the academic exam. In order to get more fund as much as possible, they may be caught up in a temporary appointment and forget to study at school.
Therefore
, we can see that having a task while studying at school will be a good chance for teens to grow up,
however
, without the control of adults and themselves, they may be depraved in that task.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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