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Band 8

Lately, your company has informed you that you will be taking a lead role in an upcoming management project. Write a letter to a senior asking for guidance and request him/her to share his/her experience with you.

Dear Mr. Vinod, I am happy that the company has selected me as a lead role in the
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 and given me a chance to make my career better with the company's growth. Before I lead
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, I need some guidance on managing the team, scheduling work and other tasks. I have worked as a
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 coordinator under you and have gained many skills and knowledge about the different tasks. Because
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 is a major
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 of the company, I need to be careful on each work of the
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.
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, If we succeed in
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, It can have a positive effect on our organisation and that's why I want to know about your experience with previous
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. I request you to provide me with your experience like
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 how you manage a team, a schedule of different chores and other things which can help me to complete my
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 successfully. Looking forward to hearing from your side. Regards, Ankit

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Coherence & Cohesion
Improve paragraph structure by ensuring each paragraph contains a single clear idea. For example, separate the request for guidance from the explanation of its importance.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider refining your language further to enhance clarity and professionalism. For instance, instead of 'scheduling work and other tasks' you can use 'tasks scheduling and resource allocation'.
Suitable Writing Tone
You maintained a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter.
Task Achievement
Your letter thoroughly addresses the task requirements, including asking for guidance and sharing experiences.
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