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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the advantages?

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The
 main topic talk about a new way of
interaction
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have replacing
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have replaced
face
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-to-
face
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 dialogue among people. Nowadays to the birth of social media everything is being easy, in
fact there
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fact, there
 are a lot of
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apps
 which give you the possibility
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to
 meet people around the world from your house.
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This
 factor could be interesting for people that live aboard indeed these people have the possibility to
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express in speech
speak
 and see the own family removing the distance between them. Today you can
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judge or regard; look upon; judge
think
thinks
 that it is a really good invention because you can reach everybody
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example, if
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a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
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 a
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a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
 person and
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great thing
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a great thing
 for people which do not have the possibility to move
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deem to be
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the job meeting, this
the job meeting this
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 is a great
invention in
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invention, in
fact with
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fact, with
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metod
a way of doing something, especially a systematic way; implies an orderly logical arrangement (usually in steps)
method
methods
 we can reduce the
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quantity
quantities
 of
travell
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
travel
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 reduce the
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environmental
 impact.
On the other hand
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 social media can reduce the importance of
interaction
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face
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furthermore we
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furthermore, we
 need to be
carefull
exercising caution or showing care or attention
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,
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 as regards the relationship people could drop in bad situations. 
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 the example which we
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are giving
give
 to
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(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
young
 people, we have to teach the importance of
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a mutual or reciprocal action; interacting
interaction
interactions
 and explain the right meaning of Social media.
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however we
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However, we
However we
 can not decide to not accept
this
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 new way of
interaction
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 because the world is going forward as regards technology. In my opinion the advantages overweight the
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 if there is an appropriate use of social
media but
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media, but
 we have to be smart to understand that the
interaction
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face
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face
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 it is
funtamental
serving as an essential component
fundamental
 for humans.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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