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Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behavior. Do you agree or disagree?

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For the
last
 2 decades, it has seen that millions of foreigners moving from one nation to another for a better life, a quality education for their children and to
settled
Suggestion
settle
 in a safe and progressive rustic. Every immigrant has a different purpose to fly to another land.
To begin
 with, huge number of people in developed countries because they believe that other land have more opportunities rather than their own
country
. Education, jobs and save society are the prime purpose of migration.
For example
, parents send their children to western countries because they consider the education level is far better and the employment rate
also
 high in developing nations. Some refugees migrate because they just only want a secure place to live where they can raise their kids. Newcomer brings their cultures and rituals with them, they celebrate the festivals and important days in the outer world.
On the other hand
, sometimes mass migration creates troubles for local. It is said that " do what Roman do". It is better for newcomers to learn foreign culture, history and language which will make their life easier and comfortable to survive in a different
country
.
For Instance
, if a migrant move from a non-English
country
Accept comma addition
country, then
then
 It will be advantageous for him to find suitable option learn a language
therefore
 he communicate with locals and understand the
country
 lifestyle. At the end of the day, I would say people do not have to forget their culture and history and where they come from. They have to practice their rituals.
However
, they must require to get a chance to learn about foreign culture as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • migration
  • integration
  • social cohesion
  • cultural clashes
  • original culture
  • diversity
  • identity loss
  • psychological distress
  • balanced approach
  • local customs
  • cultural identities
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